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Geremia
Geremia
Nov 19, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

LIKE MADMEN, SEERS AND FOOLS rewrite

LIKE MADMEN, SEERS AND FOOLS

Riding waves electric
like bolts of lghtening
striking deep inside my brain
I touch upon my own madness
perceptions sharp and clear
dark knowings and understsndings
too painful for my mind to bear
my voice to speak

my thoughts and senses carry me
deeper into seeing
and like madmen, seers and fools
I suddenly know a dfferent dreaming

I hover closely to myself
in fear of separation
looking from the outside in
I watch my body slowly die
no longer able
to hold my soul safe inside

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wesley snow

wesley snow

13 years 8 months ago

Your grasp of language and phrase is astounding.

I hover closely to myself
in fear of separation

Have you ever considered (seriously) writing lyric poetry? You know. Form, rhyme, all that nonsense? Your ability to twist a phrase to create a perspective is made for it.
wesley

Geremia

Geremia

13 years 8 months ago

Thanks, I write by instinct.

Thanks, I write by instinct. I don't have the skill for writing poetry with a definitive structure or rhyme scheme. Form and content for me come together "naturally' as I write--not always sucessfully, I am afraid,
Jess,good friend, has helped me a great deal, but he would have a "field day" with some of these poems. Ouch! lol

My poetry-- f that is what it is--is being published on KINDLE and should come out next week, My writing does not please everyone,but then again, we each of us take our chances.

joe