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Nov 23, 2011
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On Lethe's Shore--re-write
ON LETHE'S SHORE
[alzheimer's]
Before they cross the river Styx
they drink of Lethe’s waters clear
to forget what remembering is.
it was from a distant shore
I saw you linger there
and when you took of the magic
you turned and looked
but didn't see me anymore
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
wesley snow
13 years 10 months ago
Other than...
...my usual gripe about punctuation, I can't offer a single constructive suggestion concerning this poem. It is sudden, real and brutally poignant. wesley
Geremia
13 years 10 months ago
Thanks. I need to remember
Thanks. I need to remember about punctuation.
The Greek myth was the metaphor I needed.
Joe
weirdelf
13 years 10 months ago
Joe, I hate this poem.
Some things like Alzheimers are not dealt with by mythological allusions. They are the the very real pain of here and now.
Geremia
13 years 10 months ago
Jess, my mother died of
Jess, my mother died of Prkinsonan demetia..You don't need to tell me, I took care of her at home where she died with me by her side. I saw her in hell, and I wasn't far behind.I, too, fear it, There s a deep sadness in this Greek myrh
Need to follow your own rules: Critique form, not content.
Best to you, my friend
Joe
Geremia
13 years 10 months ago
P.S. Jess
You pushed the wrong button with me, Jess. This is how I sublimate the unspeakable--things I won't even share with my sister or brother. We all need to face our demons in our own way. I haven't seen any true emotional content in your poetry yet.
Best
Joe