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Dec 11, 2011
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Systematic Crashes...
I don't know why it happens
there is no warning, reason, rhyme
but crashes are drawn to me
they happen all the time
There should be some alarm
"This system's going to fail"
I could prevent a nervous break-down
and another computer-sale
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Written for Lou's Splash-Pool workshop.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
scribbler
13 years 7 months ago
hi Geez
Reckon I covered all I wanted to say in workshop. Now if people want to know what was said they should have joined up lol............stan
Geezer
13 years 7 months ago
Yep...
you're right! ~ Gee
wesley snow
13 years 7 months ago
A curious little poem.
My computer bit the big one a few months back. A major pain to replace the drive. wesley
Geezer
13 years 7 months ago
Did you...
do it yourself? Curious... ~ Gee
lou
13 years 7 months ago
Hi
Gee,
first of sll in my opinion, all that needs changing is the last line, maybe uou could say something like, 'another wiff of hysteria.
lou