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THE RUNAWAY FILES

The ground was cold and hard;
i was gasping for air as i ran.
barking, barking was behind me
i dared not to look back
for i was afraid that if i did
i'd be trampled by the dogs that chased me.
i was guessing there were about five or six of them,
all police dogs,
oh shoot, i thought, as i dropped the runaway file.
ahead of me i saw Allie and Ben running for their lives.
i was tired, yet i kept going,
running,
running for freedom,
for a new life.
i stumbled backwards, though,
and reached for the files.
this was the beginning of
my new life
as the keeper of the Runaway Files...

to be continued...

About This Poem

Last Few Words: this is the beginning of a story i'm going to tell you; join me in the world of the Keeper of the Runaway Files.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York, U.S.

Favorite Poets: Shakespeare, Edgar Allen Poe,

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emogothgirl

emogothgirl

13 years 6 months ago

hey hey hey

way to go sis! no critique cuz i'm the one who typed it. :) ;)