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Snowballs

I’m tired
and have no poetry left;
so says Mary and me.
Meanwhile,
Mike and Chris tell me
it’s only a matter of time.
And Toby bleats
“ya gotta start somewhere.”
When I dropped the artistry,
I dropped the philosophy;
the fact is
I don’t even want to hear my own philosophy.
I’m ducking under snowballs
that occasionally shatter in the air
because it is too cold and dry
for them to be formed.
Every now and then
an expert bully packs one,
takes aim
and wallops me in the face.
One or two is annoying,
more than that brings enough pain
to make me think twice.
I think I’m armed with grenades;
but the box is marked “do not open until Christmas”
and I dare not look inside.

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Psyve

Psyve

14 years 5 months ago

Hey Connect

I missed this one earlier. Read Soraya and thought... This is interesting....what else has he written?

Wasn't disappointed. Enjoyed the read. Your use of metaphor is subtle, yet hard hitting.

Nicely done.

Just entered the snowfight recently, myself...

Psyve

C

Conect11

14 years 5 months ago

Thanks Psyve!

Well done joining the snowball fight, may you stand firm. God bless.

Blue_Halcyon

Blue_Halcyon

14 years 5 months ago

***Throws a snowball at Mark***

Oh shoot! I hope that wasn't a grenade disguised as a snowball! They can be sneaky like that. Good to see you back on neo! And I guess you and mary were wrong - you do have some poetry left. ;-)

Psyve

Psyve

14 years 5 months ago

We'll see how much poetry is left....

"We'll see how much poetry is left"....It all sounds a bit like fuel tank... full, half full....

... and I've been running on only fumes for a while now...

Psyve

Blue_Halcyon

Blue_Halcyon

14 years 5 months ago

Well

You know how life is - it has a way throwing enough things at us until
the tank starts to fill back up. If you don't empty it out some, it will eventually
overflow.