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Jan 28, 2012
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A Conversations With Pops
I had a conversation the other day
About a part of my life best forgotten
My father spoke to me and I listened attentively
The sweaty palms dry to the sound of his calm voice
Is he being sincere or saving a man filled with fear
He told me how I silenced doctors, and specialists
How I overcame their predictions by leaps and bounds
The sun was drinking its coffee as the news anchor spoke
We paid no attention as my father verbally motivated
A son that didn’t only impress but left so many speechless
College for me was not in my destiny, oh folks continued testing me
If I don’t attempt to aspire than why waste the breath
No matter our maker we are all given a blank page
Some have a few words written as for me they weren’t worth quitting
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
13 years 5 months ago
I'm looking...
forward to the polished draft on this one. I'm not sure how to make that last line fit. Maybe if you say:
There are some that have a few written, I don't have many, but I'm not quitting. ~ Gee
wesley snow
13 years 5 months ago
This seemed like it needed some piece of information...
... not offered to fully understand. I had a little trouble with it. I'm not the fastest on the uptake and I think I missed something. Nothing wrong with the poetry though.
wesley
weirdelf
13 years 5 months ago
Yes, tend tend to think something changed about that last line
would round this poem out nicely. This is a bold suggestion, but it might give you a thread or thought
Some have a few words written
mine were in code, finally broken