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Feb 15, 2012
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Genie in a bottle
Your words of kindness
Encourages
Eases burning desire
Caged in my bones
To end my life
Your love of goodness
Lifts me up
From ground in which I’ve fallen
Hard cold and damp
Your warmth covers me
Like a Genie in a bottle
I decanter your gift
Place on a mantel
Above my heart
Reach for on days like these
About This Poem
Last Few Words: sound better Jess. i hope so. amazing how one word use changes whole intent lol
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 5 months ago
oops, control freak, what?
this is well written but seriously flawed in intent.
It sounds like you only want him when he has something nice to say.
Barbara Writes
13 years 5 months ago
lol it does read rather selfish
where there is peace and calm
unrest crouches at the door
then kindness sucks you in for the kill
kindness place on a mantlepiece
to soothe the blows later
is a coping solution
leaving has its own demons
staying the course makes you stronger
unless it kills you first
Barbara Writes
13 years 4 months ago
glad you like
thanks for commenting