Wakeful Night

All night long
I stay awake
Eyes on the screen
I read them all
Posted pieces
They dance around
Some short and long
Rich in content
Varied in structure
From free verse
In feet and meters
Rhythmic heart beats
A fusion of words
In hearts of men

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

Comments

Candlewitch

13 years 5 months ago

Hello :)

Good title and language use. The content is a subject I am familiar with. I liked these lines:

Rhythmic heart beats
A fusion of words
In hearts of men

always, Cat

t. reflexion

13 years 4 months ago

Thank you

It is a piece I wrote to chatch up with Neopoet workshop, but missed the dateline, best wishes

weirdelf

13 years 5 months ago

I don't generally like poetry about poetry

but you have written this superbly.

I am especially impressed that you are challenging yourself in poetic form.

Would you be offended if I said I am proud of you? I don't mean to be condecending.

t. reflexion

13 years 4 months ago

No, I am not offend

Rather, always happy to get your coments and criticism, I tried writing this during the just concluded workshop on more meters, Thank you for making me to hear the beating of my heart and the heartbeats of others on posted pieces of poetry. Best wishes