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Through the Dust Did Come....Movito
He did appear to have possession
of a Mojo with a Konk-konk-cheroo!
his hesitance cost him, valuably;
he'd still be sitting in a room with no "view".
Take my place, won't you feel the "magic"?
one could learn a thing, or three;
this cursed, dusty, desert's hollow,
with vacant emptiness as far as one can, see.
Then, came this way....a stranger-boy
who could see right-past, the dust;
and, then know what was coming, next
with a sixth sense he could trust.
The private dust-storms, wind-gusts, and shadows
played video/audio games, and tricks;
but this dark, boy-ish stranger, Movito
was always straight-up, in the "mix".
Movito saw this desert
for exactly as, it was;
a place where sad men, go to die
while they keep working, on their "buzz".
Movito then, trespassed past Destiny
his movements swift-like, stealth;
he learned of the Shadow Dreamscape
paying close attention to preserve his, health!
Strange, unknown, desert "oddities"
cause havoc, in the blistering sun;
so, Movito lets the lonely, desert
keep thinking, that it's finally won!
Then, when the shadows stretch in length
in our next, long winter's noon;
the wind will scream, "Movito"
and, reflect his "legend" off of the moon.
Then, after all's been said, and done
and the desert shares not, one clue;
Movito will return through the dust;
to prove his "legend", doth still, ring...true.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: A little "teasing" with a friendly "legend". doc.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Ian.T
13 years 3 months ago
Doc
The title completely threw me as it is an Electric Scooter so I climbed over that obstacle, and read the piece and it turned out to be a story, Loved It
Yours Ian
docmaverick
13 years 3 months ago
Dearest Ian....
...You've always been overly generous with you're remarks; and this is no exception. I greatly appreciate your encouragement, friend Ian; and I'm happy I didn't disappoint you.
Thanx again,
docmaverick.