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You Are,You

Have faith in yourself ...there is nothing beyond life ...as you are the maker of a destiny ...
you are....
the sun god entity....depending on imagination... time has gifted.. unknowingly to an only entity ...
friend tis only you...

Believe me there’s nothing beyond life...
no hubby... no wife... no father...no mom.... no siblings too...
none except you..
to alone traverse...
the universe ...
yes friend all alone...
how I wish one could generate a positive thought
of uniqueness ...
that one is
only of a kind that's
YOU...

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: ROU

Comments

weirdelf

13 years 3 months ago

interesting structure

I'm glad to see you using longer lines, your thoughts become more lucid and consistent.

The tone is strange, almost eery, nihilistic or solipsist, or is that my eery, solipsist mindset? [smiles]
Me like.

loved

13 years 3 months ago

almost eery, nihilistic or solipsist, or is that my eery, solips

You are a great trainer ,
you now send me to
Goggle
to understand words
not encompassed
in my dwarfed mind.
shall and note for future guidance.
love you,Sir.

Ian.T

13 years 3 months ago

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A much more flowing write and as Jess says the longer lines gave a better picture to your words.
Well done young Bard, Yours Ian.T

loved

13 years 3 months ago

Thanks for your conviction Ian

you still call me a bard
I feel like I'm one

a NATURAL creator
without any
ComPetition

FREE
as in free

VERSE

Ian.T

13 years 3 months ago

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Natural Free Verse is Prose, tempered verse with form is poetry ..
There is a workshop on both at the moment can't rem if you are on that one it would be good for you and a lot of fun.
You could run Naked through the grassed fields then sing the songs and praise of the great Bard.
At the moment they are trying to put the great Bard's work to music I await the outcome, Yours Ian.T

loved

13 years 3 months ago

FOR THE MORE INTELLIGENT JUST TO SHARE eerie we all know...

A. Nihilist may refer to: a person who believes human existence has no objective meaning, purpose, or intrinsic value, see nihilism • Nihilist movement, a Russian ...

B.sol•ip•sism
[sol-ip-siz-uhm] Show IPA noun
1. Philosophy . the theory that only the self exists, or can be proved to exist.
2. extreme preoccupation with and indulgence of one's feelings, desires, etc.;

egoistic

self-absorption.

C.Solips
Ambient textures clash with fevered pronunciations,
mystical chanting clashes with wild guitar.
A tunnel of contradictions, like "me"
"Like me I made them!"

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