Old Miners epitaph, ...My Dad

A lovely heart felt write, I have lived with the miner's in Wales here in the UK and the stories, the life's and deaths they hold so dear and the comradeship of their families held for ever in memory.
I wrote a piece that's called "I Felt the Earth" it was of their lives here but that's another story.
To make this one a little better the two lines:-
"and time is held to account"
"as the old miners old lamp goes out"
The "and" can go in the first line and the second "Old" in the second line..
Loved the write and the feelings it portrayed, Yours Ian.T

just a few typos

‘to listen to gods lullaby’ --- god’s – needs an apostrophe

‘As the sun bids the day a’due’ --- adieu

‘nature looks on through a mother eyes
as the old miners old lamp goes out’
- perhaps ‘mother’ needs an apostrophe and ‘s’
or lose the ‘a’
‘nature looks on through a mother’s eyes’
or
‘nature looks on through mother eyes’

as the old miners old lamp goes out’ --- miner’s
also you have used the word 'old' very close here - same line even.
- perhaps another word for one of them?

and
‘His children know of his life time’ --- ? lifetime – one word

this is a beautiful write/ dedication
I like the first line and the last lines especially

love judy

Beautiful write Believe. the first stanza caught my interest
and I couldn't resist reading the poem to finish.
the wording flows neatly from line to line.

the second line of the last stanza:
==== His loves his dreams and his tears====
pardon me but I think there should be a comma
separating (His loves) from (his dreams)
E.g: His loves, his dreams and his tears

great poem

On your profile you wrote "Bad poet" It ain't so. You write lovely poetry

Linda