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LOVE, Possession lost

Love,
sweet scented rock of life,
Untouched by death,
or dawns delight,
not of this world,
a flower that grows,
dimensions
angels blessed, adorned
Of battles lost,
and battles won.
Beneath its blooded flag -
succumb
Save only few
can justly say
good or bad,
they won’t betray.
Residing from the darkness lit
Desire forbid,
or - jealous spit.
That ranks of man
forsake the crown.
in chivalrous act’s
the noble found.
Where does it reside today
The maker never did he say’
What power can make a man remain
Betray his soul,
to ease loves pain.
Humanity
may judge us well,
though life may end
in blooded dell,
of all our deeds
that must be cost
Will love remain,
possession lost

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Submitted this in a contest on the old site, just re-listing it

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: sydney,Australia, AUS

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believe

believe

13 years 2 months ago

Thanks Salman, Im always

Thanks Salman, Im always advised to put plenty lines in, on neopoet' (Although I never understand why?) so I did it in this case,. ..
...Although I myself prefer more lucid regular lines and par's as the old fashioned poetry's did;
but' I stand to be advised,

I will never learn how Im supposed to present my work! ....(because I just "dont get it")..
........but am happy to be corrected and advised........if you guys are willing to help....thanks again

Ian.T

Ian.T

13 years 2 months ago

Believe

Very good write the only thing apart from what Jess said is that the later references that use the word love or loves can be changed as the word is there so bold to start with LOVE:-
intro:-Love,...... Not Needed my old memory remembered the title...
(Love) good or bad, .....Extra word not needed...
Where does (love) it reside today,... Still remember the theme....
to ease (loves) its pain, .....Just a plural of that word again...
Not sure but prefer the absence of the word once decried in the title.
Just a thought, Yours Ian.T

believe

believe

13 years 2 months ago

"love"

Thanks Ian, took some of your advise Thks

Ian.T

Ian.T

13 years 2 months ago

Believe

That is now spot on and flows well and means a lot..
On poetry now the layout and form you will need to attend one of the workshops, Probably one of Jess's, though we have the odd skirmish, he is one of the best, but don't you dare say I said so, lol, Yours Ian.T