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May 01, 2012
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"Daddy's Girl"
Her innosence gone, prematurely
she's like a full-grown, glistening pearl;
a flawless unit of nature
not to mention, "daddy's girl";
imprisoned, and surrounded by
the thought that it "feels", wrong;
told, "not to yell", and "not to cry"....
because he wants her to be...strong.
An extremely trusting child
childishly placing trust;
on her shoulders, guilt is piled
as she hits the streets, or bust.
From her family she is given
the insult of disdain,
a shameful life she has been livin'
so, on the streets she will remain.
The trouble is, her wounds can't heal
worse than any type of curse,
so, she tries not to "feel" anything
because, it only makes things, worse!
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
13 years 2 months ago
Hello doc.
An intersting theme you're presenting indeed..
Raising a child is never an easy thing to do,
in fact I consider it one of the most difficult.We
so often are cruel in raising our children because
we want them to be perfect
Your second stanza tells me a lot.Very much enjoyed..