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Augusto
May 05, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

It is all "Love"

It is a step ahead,
It is a walk forward,
It is a road all new,
It is a path I chose,
It is a journey that is slow,
It is a speed to know,
It is time all to remember,
It is a joyful environment to be,
It is a feeling to be with you,
It is a caress that changed me,
It is a word that pulled me to you,
It is all "Love".

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judyanne

judyanne

13 years 5 months ago

hello augusto

much too many 'it is's imho
totally detracting from the message

i found it rather annoying :)
- also too bulky - needs breaking up - i would suggest something like

'It is a step ahead,
a walk forward,
a road all new,

'It is a path I chose,
a journey that is slow,
a speed to know,

It is time all to remember,
a joyful environment to be,
a feeling to be with you,

It is a caress that changed me,
a word that pulled me to you,

It is all
Love

i stress though - this is only my opinion :)
love judy