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May 30, 2012
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So, You think You Can Write!
a wordsmith
true
fluent in argument,
disdain, and the king's English
humorous and entertaining
yet, wryness, wit, and whimsey
(adorable little playskool tools that they are)
cannot, in and of themselves,
construct substance
a wordsmith
fine
but as far as being a writer,
we respectfully decline
to offer a bid
that being said,
it's apparent you've been called
but regrettably
not chosen
About This Poem
Last Few Words: The title and piece are a play on the tv competition show "so, you think you can dance". It is a much too generous (SELF) critique of my writing skills.
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
judyanne
13 years ago
lol al
i'm sure you'd make the finals :)
great intermittent rhyme and alliteration
i especially like the internal rhyme of 'skool' and 'tools' and the 'w' alliteration in
'yet, wryness, wit, and whimsey
(adorable little playskool tools that they are)'
an enjoyable read
love judy xxx
Ian.T
13 years ago
BL
A fun look that makes us smile, "Playskool" well they make toys for kids, is that who you meant??? Good advert I would send them the Bill, lol
Yours Ian.T
scribbler
13 years ago
hi
And yet we keep on pounding the keyboard lol.........stan
brittle light
13 years ago
Thanks, Stan, Ian, and Judy
I appreciate your comments and time as always