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May 31, 2012
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Night's Embrace
Lying in my bed,
Darkness all ‘round,
A million thoughts pass through my head,
With an eerie lack of sound,
Visions of little consequence,
A homesick mans faded friends,
Lost lover’s stroll by in a motley of shame,
Sights that make no sense,
My waking dreams that do not end,
Sleep comes now,
A shadow grudgingly embraced,
Dawn is just ‘round the bend,
Night follows dawn with unseemly haste,
To bring me back to where it began.
Zachary J. Eakin
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Trying something new, so don't blast me to badly.
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 1 month ago
No need to blast it.
some great lines
A million thoughts pass through my head,
With an eerie lack of sound,
Lost lover’s stroll by in a motley of shame,
A couple of nitpicks
Darkness all ‘round,
Darkness all around, [I think would scan better]
A homesick mans faded friends,
A homesick man's faded friends,
Yes, a very good poem beautifully expressed.