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Geremia
Geremia
Jul 05, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

HOME MOVIES-- edited

HOME MOVIES

Home movies black and white
faded celluloid 1940s
16 millimeter dry and brittle
flickering through time
a blinding light
and we splice a life
back together
again...
empty reflections
of yesterdays
flickering through time

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: USA

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Kailashana2

13 years ago

Try to find another word(s)

Try to find another word(s) instead of *soulless*. Maybe omit it if you can't.

Well, my opinion anyway, it's too redundant, and overused in poetry. Otherwise, this is another poem that rates another look. ;-)

~A

Ian.T

Ian.T

13 years ago

Joe

A good theme and well presented Anna's change seems to have worked as it read OK,
Yours Ian.T
PS:- hope you are coping with things, the children send their unconditional love, Sadie and friends

K

Kailashana2

13 years ago

It's been said that nature

It's been said that nature abhors a vacuum. Your Gerimia-ness remains intact. Think of all the ugly people who are well enough. rofl.