judyanne

Aug 16, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

precept five confusion

they say booze is the great antagonist
abstention needs be sought in earnest
of liver, kidney, brain and bladder
intoxication's the great destroyer

the teacher said to love my enemy
if I desire to be someone worthy
so does it not seem order of divine
that I should love my spirits and wine?
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About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Comments

William Saint George

12 years 11 months ago

The last stanza packs a punch

The last stanza packs a punch. Fun and humorous write.

judyanne

12 years 11 months ago

thanks william

just a bit of fun as my brain is dry at the moment :)

love judy xxx

judyanne

12 years 11 months ago

lol eph

they say there is no such thing as coincidence ....
is it great minds thinking alike.... or....

and stop blaming the farts on the dog !

love judy
xxx

Dalton

12 years 11 months ago

Hi Judy

A fun punchy piece. I don't drink anymore but in my day I always had a thirst on me. A mispent youth is time well spent but at some point we must leave it behind. Nice write

John

judyanne

12 years 11 months ago

thanks john

not really much of a drinker myself, although i did down my share in my younger days... these days i prefer to wake up with a clear head

just a bit of fun here as my head is very clear at the moment lol (there is nothing in it)

love judy
xxx

Ian.T

12 years 11 months ago

Judy

Pass the bottle let us dwell a while on the the thought that there is a drought of words..
That in its self sounds like silence, now I know that there is no such thing as silence, maybe just maybe you are not listening to the noise of life out there.
I shall sup some more and dwell on such things......................
Ah! it is that you are moving into unknown places, Yenti, Sparrow, and even Ian.T, have been there it just needs a bloody great spoon to stir the universe..
Oh! the second line of your round (Well it is time you bought us a drink or two) :- "abstention needs be sought in earnest" Does this need a TO in there to make its sense reveal itself to us ???
Excuse me for being out at the moment (My mind that is) I shall return when this fine piece has been replaced by your usual fine writing,
Yours, Ian.

judyanne

12 years 11 months ago

hi ian

thanks for the read and comments
as for the 'to' - i had it there to begin with, but it messed with the meter, and i really don't think it is needed.

love judy
xxx

Candlewitch

12 years 11 months ago

Dear Judy,

I love this wise yet humorous piece!

I partied hardy in my youth. But now that I'm older I imbibe much more sensibly when the occasion warants it.

always, Cat

judyanne

12 years 11 months ago

ditto cat

the old body and brain doesn't take to well to it any more

thanks for the read and comment
love judy
xxx

judyanne

12 years 11 months ago

ditto cat

the old body and brain doesn't take to well to it any more

thanks for the read and comment
love judy
xxx

Ian.T

12 years 11 months ago

Cat

Cat drinks the cream, yet do I detect a touch of whiskey in there,
We call it Baylies here ???? LOL also there is an Irish one that the name escapes me at the moment, imbibe indeed, I will search the web to see if there is an occasion every day lol, love to you all, Yours Ian.T

judyanne

12 years 11 months ago

oh yes

i do like the baileys lol
xxx