brittle light

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sieve

heavy night air sags
motionless
waiting for rain
as misty blue jazz
seeps
through a lingering haze

a sullen sigh
a twinge of heartache
and for the moment
sadness seems cool

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I was listening to Miles Davis' album "Kind Of Blue" as I wrote this piece late last night...It does this to me every time I hear it.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

Comments

brittle light

12 years 10 months ago

I hope everyone has a personal music

that moves them. There certainly are a lot of choices and styles. I think it was Friedrich Nietzsche who said "life without music would not be worth living" ( although he said it in German, I'm sure).

as for heatache\ heartache, I meant to type heartbreak, and I think I'll stick with it...sorry!

thanks for your input

Ian.T

12 years 10 months ago

Al

A very good picture of where you are, the heavy night air sags..
Yes! this is how it seems as night wraps its clammy arms around the city dwellers, as I notice that you are in New York.
Cities always have an atmosphere of their own, I love the villages and countryside Stan's empire of walks..
Take care, Yours Ian.T

brittle light

12 years 10 months ago

Ian

thanks for stopping in.

I have lived in New York City, but not for a long time now.
I live in Upstate New York ( Lake Champlain valley), quite a distance from the Big Apple but New York is still "my city"

you take care as well

regards

Nordic cloud

12 years 10 months ago

A super picture of sound

In colour, you caught the mood and swatched it onto our minds much as jazz can, at its best.

Ann

brittle light

12 years 10 months ago

thank you Ann

you have a unique ability... conveying your thoughts so expressivly!
I admire that immensely.

thank you

weirdelf

12 years 10 months ago

It's nicely written

but kind of tritely sad.
I would not consider it for the workshop
" Mindful Memorable Freeform: The Challenge"

a nice sad poem

brittle light

12 years 10 months ago

I suppose there are degrees of sadness

a mood while listening to a piece of music might be named sad, although we would all presumably see it as a small, almost insignificant kind of sadness, hopefully, not extending too far beyond the length of the performance, much like this poem...definitly not deep or depressive...so a "nice" sad poem seems appropriate

thanks for your thoughts