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Geremia
Geremia
Sep 27, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

ABOUT CURSES--updated

ABOUT CURSES: 1882 , Calabrian hills

She bared her breasts
untouched by love’s caress
or infant’s kiss
to the winter moon
pale and full
demon clouds riding
a cold north wind
passing through.

In unholy Gregorian
she murmured
times three
and three more
an incantation
upon each generation
of the House of Red
she lay a curse on six plus one
beyond seven none.

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About This Poem

Last Few Words: The family stole her pigs and refused to admit it.

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: USA

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Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 9 months ago

Joe

Lovely to bring back the curses that made the day's shrouded in fear more fun to the imagination..
On the first line the word "Bore" which is to drill or something like would you be better to use "Bared"
bared :-Lacking the usual or appropriate covering or clothing; naked:
Might be an American thing though ???
This is coming around to writing poetry that defies your state and is great to read,
Go well young man and know that we are here thinking of you,
Yours Ian.T

Geremia

Geremia

12 years 9 months ago

Thanks, Ian, Did an edit.I

Thanks, Ian, Did an edit.I wonder at the human spirit to survive its humanity. I wish there were things I never knew,

weirdelf

weirdelf

12 years 9 months ago

Love the line

'In unholy Gregorian'
Gregorian chants can so easily be heard/viewed/perverted as unholy rituals.

I would tend to lose the asterisk and explanation, it detracts and is unnecessary.

Hmm... those last few words either make or break the poem. I would lose them or incorporate them into the poem.