A Triolet For You

For you my gardens thrive and bloom,
to send their perfumes all your way.
To weave the heaven's beauts on loom,
for you my gardens thrive and bloom.
The sunrise shines to glint the gloom,
and casts its rays on plots I lay.
For you my gardens thrive and bloom,
to send their perfumes all your way.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: A triolet is a French form of eight lines. Lines 7 and 8 repeat lines 1 and 2. Line 1 is also repeated as line 4. The rhyme scheme is a-b-A-a-b-A-B. They are written in iambic tetrameter.

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

Ian.T

12 years 9 months ago

Rula

A lovely write just an S missing on line 5 garden, should it be gardens??
You are brave to try all these forms of poetry, I wish I had a little more time to seek them out..
Well done, Yours Ian.T

Rula

12 years 9 months ago

Thank you Ian

for reading and commenting.And yes, I always like to try new forms when time allows. As I said I cheated the form from Wesley and gave it a shot. Really happy you came by to read and leave such a nice comment.Thanks again.

Rula

12 years 9 months ago

Thanks bp

for refering to that triolet. I have just had a look and I like it.
As for the title, I think it is something that I have inherited from my dear Mentor Wesley Snow who always likes to entitle those forms with their names and so I like to follow his steps especially when I try it for the first time.

Appreciate your nice comment.

Geezer

12 years 9 months ago

Maybe a better...

title would be: Scent of Love. ? Liked it. ~ Gee

Rula

12 years 9 months ago

Geezer

won't find a better title if I need to replace mine but as I said to bp I keep it with the form's name as my mentor Sir Wesley Snow liked to
Thanks for the visit. Much appreciated.

Rula

12 years 9 months ago

Lonnie

Always generous in your comments.I'm happy you find this a worth read.
Thanks a lot