potion

Member since July 8, 2008

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Forbidden and Hidden

Posted Aug 28, 2009 · 16 lines · 1 critiques

I am confused, broken and blank.

Staid because you are so close but I cannot touch.

My keeper keeping the distance I only long to be near.

Smiling like you need me and touch like you want me,

but I am fearful of returning the favor.

I long your hand to be in mine, sneaking a brush of your warm flesh.

Out of breath when I cannot serve you,

but this fantasy affair can only last so long.

He will be here soon and you can no longer be mine for I am his.

His wrath is my fear and love but you are my love and passion.

You are my hidden desire, and my forbidden sin I have already committed.

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5 years of membership
August 2009
29 Sat

Received a critique
on Forbidden and Hidden from @Ravenshakti
"What a beautiful and passionate poem! It is imbued with elegance and a sensual fascination... A delicious combination! Potion... I remain, enthralled. Raven"
28 Fri

Posted a poem
Forbidden and Hidden
"I am confused, broken and blank."
Open thread 16 lines
27 Thu

Received a critique
on Two Glass Tears from @Sourav
"Nicely written. Very emotionally charged up write. Enjoyed it!"
27 Thu

Received a critique
on Two Glass Tears from @Seren
"This is the best write I have read of yours ... its a wonderful play on words ... love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ..."
27 Thu

Posted a poem
Two Glass Tears
"Dripping from my eyes like rain drops from the skytoo timid and shy to fight or try."
Open thread 19 lines
23 Sun

Posted a poem
The Green Curtain
" Swaying in the wind on that summer daygreen like the grass not as the sun could portray."
Open thread 11 lines
22 Sat

Received a critique
on Us from @Seren
"There are some excellent lines in this one ... beautifully done ... Admitting is my fear for my pride will shatter, Whether rock or glass with you it does not matter. The unknown my love, with you as my passion, You are…"
21 Fri

Posted a poem
Us
"With every breath taken all I know is you,"
Open thread 20 lines
19 Wed

Posted a poem
a movie for your thoughts
" My most well known memory at the moment would be my "
Open thread 54 lines
15 Sat

Highest posting month
August 2009 — 5 poems
July 2009
07 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
August 2008
27 Wed

Received a critique
on sampson from @orgami
"classical anthology I like this poem the reverb momentum like old speechs or a moment in court Some good writing here"
27 Wed

Received a critique
on sampson from @easylife_2
"Is this like a personal evaluation?I liked it anyway.Thank you."
27 Wed

Critiqued
"Rivers of blood" by @Michael Landau
"whoa intense"
27 Wed

First critique offered
on "Rivers of blood" by @Michael Landau
27 Wed

Posted a poem
sampson
"Through these glass eyes, I see not unity."
Open thread 30 lines
July 2008
19 Sat

Received a critique
on staid from @themoonman
"there is definatly one here now... very good too. Your use of our lanuage is obviously more wider than mine( I will have to look up a couple of words).. but I believe I got the gist of it. enjoyed the read... and will c…"
19 Sat

Received a critique
on staid from @orgami
"mined from falling spread in hills of want of supple treasured catchs of empy releases rich ore blemish radiant and sifted (thinking of mining this eve anyway Potion I love your poem and words usage here You gave love a…"
18 Fri

Posted a poem
staid
"Through this guilt I cannot manage to encounter preferences of  thy heart."
Open thread 12 lines
08 Tue

Posted a poem
memoir
"It couldn’t have been too long ago when all of this started; in fact I vividly remember all of my experiences with him like it was yesterday. All the pain, and love, and anguish, all the spite, and rage, but above all, all the care and FEELING he made me possess for him or at all, all at once. He was definantly different and I regret giving him up every day when I’m shadowed by even the slightest memory of him. How could I have been so naïve to let such ‘perfection’ slip by me, or rather yet to push it away?"
Open thread 9 lines
08 Tue

First publication
white
08 Tue

Posted a poem
white
"The sound of his voice induces a white image in my mind,"
Open thread 23 lines
07 Mon

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August 2009 — 5 poems

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on sampson from @easylife_2

"Rivers of blood" by @Michael Landau

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