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David Briel
Member since March 4, 2026
Member for 3 months, 5 days
Brine
Why is it you became my helm
Steering me restlessly compassless,
Probably further from north than toward it.
You took my shirt and ripped up every hem,
Stripped me of my fabrics, of my realm.
And no cloth can dry this sea of evading fears.
You made cracks beneath my boat’s surface,
Having me follow through
And put me through all those tears.
But tearing me up was too great a job for you, So you just skimmed through that project too,
Left me thinking you got sick of my blue… blue…blue
Soul.
And i promise there was color, there were poppies in my hair,
Every strand entangled to stems grown through my years.
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But you came along with your nimble green fingers,
And decided to do your gardening here.
You drew the roots, fingered your way, piercing my soil.
I was your plant, and you drowned me, threw me aboard.
And as my leaves were howling,
I tuned my last chord
They had a search team come for me two weeks too late
Found my carcass hanging from branches by the ridge of the lake.
They closed my eyes, and sarcastically said «This is great».
But you were one in the crowd, grinning at the turning heads
They took my picture, and the news flash screamed «dead»
I know you lost someone, I know it hurt you —
It must have.
Although you took my seed, you could have given life,
But instead you hid it with the rest, deeply beneath your bed.
Please forgive me — that’s what I said.
And I know you’re no angel.
You can’t bring back what’s lost.
you still pass my stone on Sundays when it’s said to be rain,
And you carve into it, numbers;
The passing people deem you insane,
But you just want to keep track of time.
You bow your head and plead for forgiveness,
But if i could speak, I would tell you to get back in line.
You bring me poppies and plant them on my grave, you still call this love,
But you have no tools, no can, no glove.
Your hand’s engulfing my dirt,
And you’re watering my thirst
With a touch of brine, steeped to hold me.
I won’t live forever.
There I draw the line.
David Briel’s timeline
- March 2026
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04 Wed
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04 WedFirst publication
Brine
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04 WedJoined Neopoet
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First poem published 1 days later.
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