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Jul 03, 2024
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Dark Angel!
A shadow passes,
over me.
I try to exclude
my memories
My mind scarred and broken,
because of the past.
I found out only yesterday,
just how the die was cast.
I never imagined
this would be.
Nothing there in black ink,
but the evidence remains to be seen
The residual effect of
traumatic brain injuries.
I struggle to concentrate
can’t find my words.
My glory days are over,
with nothing more to give or offer
Except a compassionate heart!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just a sort of revision.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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