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Dec 21, 2024
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To find a loving freind!
Whispers on the wind
from a loving freind.
Taken by surprize
they are hard to come by.
When the dark clouds scatter
you might take a chance.
Just to visit, fraternize
lie down there beside her.
Make love until the sun
is swallowed in the sea.
Walk along the shoreline
lie down upon the sand.
Given this one chance
which may or may not come again.
A freind whom you can spend time with.
and walk into the sunset
Dosn't mean that much to you
your qualities blend in.
You may be narcissistic,
or maybe your a loner
It dose'nt make a difference
your lust filled eyes have faded.
Along with all the promises
you made there by the lighthouse.
A beacon to those passing by.
You see it is the end.
You may find another gal
just to make a freind!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just a little difeferent than than the last ones were!
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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