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Goodbye dad

<p>Goodbye dad I am heart broken That I have lost you So fast I can't stop crying Yes I could never believed That you had to part so soon But deep down I could not stand to see you Suffer every day Battling you disease I tried to make you Comfortable Also I had to be strong for you And it is very hard to do Yes you lost you battle And at the same time It was hard to see you leave This earth But at the same time I must understand that You are in a better place them Me You are living a new life in Heaven Without suffering Dad go ahead And rest all you want Yes darling daughter You still have a life to live On earth Ahead of you Please daughter live your life to The fullest on earth Yes daughter heaven holds a place For you Daughter do me a favor And pray for me every night AIso I will be watching you down From heaven You can't see me anymore Because the earth is far From heaven Also I am weaving goodbye To you daughter From heaven You can't see me waving goodbye To you Yes daughter one day When you die You will come to heaven And you will see me in Heaven And in heaven we Will meat again Some day Daughter of mine In this difficult time I must say that you were Brave Now it is time To grieve daughter I can't tell you How long you must grieve And I know that Everybody grieves different From each other</p>

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Country/Region: Ontario

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, Patrick Friesen, Michael ondatje

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