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Feb 07, 2023
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A Lonely Place
Tomorrow,
We will be leaving
This fearful palace,
I still remember when I was a little child
I left my mother’s womb
And came to this palace,
I liked it at first sight
Despite people’s objections
I still entered the palace to work hard
The beautiful and grand palace I saw
When I was young is actually not real
Even though there are people coming and going
But the palace is a lonely place
Perhaps everyone is lonely
That is why there is jealousy and suspicions
Because of loneliness
They desire for the king’s approval
And strive to please the king
Because of loneliness,
They desire for wealth
Therefore, hurt others
Because of loneliness
They desire for power
And abuse the authority in their hands
Your demonstration and decisiveness will only make people
Feel that you are a scary stranger.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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