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Random Haiku 3

How big is my love
for you? Moons wide,
Heavens high, Oceans deep.

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Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Maya Angelou , Lucille Clifton, Gwendolyn Brooks, Lang Leav

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T. Harmonee

T. Harmonee

7 years 11 months ago

Haiku

As you know, most Haiku poems written in modern times, don't follow the original structure of the 17 syllable: 5-7-5 line count. Also they are now broad with their choice of subject matter.When writing this, I was trying to focus on describing the size of the love for a person, Oceans deep (describing depth of love) Moons wide (describing width) Heavens high (describing height).
I was trying to move away from the traditional structure, at least with this poem.