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Treat God right
All I am asking you
That you treat God right
And don insult him
He needs you respect
So respect God
Also God is the man
That create you
With his holy hands
If wasn't for God
You would not be here
Also God is waiting
For you to pray to him
Every single night
Before you go to sleep
It only takes a couple
Minutes to do it
Then you can go
Straight to bed
Tomorrow will be
Another day
That will arrive first
Thing in the morning
You also need to
You also need to
Live your life to the fullest
Because you only
Live once
Yes every year you are
Getting older
And you can't stop that
Because God made life that
Way
Yes you also need sleep
Don't stay up too late
Because that is no good
For you
About This Poem
Last Few Words: That is a new poem Written by Aldo Kraas
Style/Type: Free verse
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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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