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We Twist And Turn

We twist and turn
like a storm in the
sky.

We shimmer and
shine like stars
in the darkened
sky.

Even though the
darkness might
seem blue there's
still more things to
say to you.

We spin like a top
round and round
we spin so hard
we might just hit the
ground.

The ground is dry
and hard like stone
promise me we will
never let go.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

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