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Artyfax
Member since November 29, 2013
Member for 12 years, 6 months
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Nightmare
A tantalizing sight amongst the dream of days
an almost imperceptible image as the sunlight plays.
I reach out but find reality wanting
I falter and hesitate to seem assenting
to dark and lustful thoughts arriving
from the murky fog of magical mountain pathways.
The likeness takes on a sensual presentation
Should I flee this fast approaching demon
Dark and heavy beside the tomb
over-powering dazzling lights in the gloom.
Crazy! This fast approaching portent of doom
creates no response just absolute resignation.
Extricate yourself from desperate endangerment
the path you choose should enable you to circumvent
this hopeless and insane inaction,
initiate a swift reaction
you need affirmative distraction.
Or else prepare yourself for lasting torment.
Artyfax’s timeline
- November 2023
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29 WedAnniversary
10 years of membership
- November 2018
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29 ThuAnniversary
5 years of membership
- November 2014
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29 SatAnniversary
One year of membership
- December 2013
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15 SunReceived a critique
on Nightmare from @billypringle
"You really need a huge reassessment of your writing. You overwrite. It's just not necessary to load your writing with such mouthfuls of multi-syllable words, there's no need for it, cut down wherever you can, find brevi…" -
12 ThuReceived a critique
on Lords Of The Air from @scribbler
"I am presently reviewing all commentary having to do with this dispute................stan" -
12 ThuReceived a critique
on The Seasons from @scribbler
"I am presently reviewing all commentary having to do with this dispute...............stan" -
12 ThuReceived a critique
on Nightmare from @scribbler
"I am presently reviewing all commentary relating to this dispute..............stan" -
10 TueReceived a critique
on The Seasons from @fanny haddock
"how come your writing as Billy Pringle is so different to that of Artyfax? What are you trying to prove?" -
10 TueReceived a critique
on Lords Of The Air from @fanny haddock
"so, you have found a way around the rules of only posting once a day Arty/Billy Pringle/John Lennon - or is it simply that you are suffering from a multiple personality disorder? I note that you claim you work in Mental…" -
07 SatCritiqued
"conflict" by @nokros
"Again I feel a liitle in awe of commenting here but ... I agree with Joe, looks to be a fine start. I also agree with several of the things that Jess pointed out. But I was OK with the still. I would however add that in…" -
07 SatCritiqued
"so long since the dawn of dusk" by @nokros
"I feel a little bit out of my depth commenting upon poems on here, but here goes anyway. I like the way this begins and love the last four lines but I feel a little uneasy about the portion from "memory of my father's v…" -
07 Sat
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07 SatCritiqued
"smouldering" by @ephraimcrud
"Hi, I really get a feel for the rythm in this piece but must admit that I stumble to understand what you are getting at in a number of places. The one line that really stumps me is "with crosses zeds naughts", this also…" -
04 WedCritiqued
"Memoriam" by @William Saint George
"Thanks but I do feel a right prune. I did not realise, I was reading and then I wasn't - it seemd to have finished. Well I will know next time, I think?" -
04 WedCritiqued
"Memoriam" by @William Saint George
"... I have just realised there is a short version and a full version - very confusing. PLease ignore my remarks" -
04 WedCritiqued
"Memoriam" by @William Saint George
"... in my reading in an attempt to become a better (or indeed a proper) poet I came across one text in which the author used to quote his own teacher. And one of his favourite quotes was,, "So what?" I agree with Roscoe…" -
03 TueReceived a critique
on Lords Of The Air from @Ian.T
"Cosford had a grass runway and I think that one of the V bombers was stripped down to only two engines and a lot of the equipment taken out and it was flown in. Not sure how they managed to get all three in there, I was…" -
03 TueCritiqued
"Happier days again" by @loved
"I enjoyed most of this poem but found the last two lines "strange" almost out of place. I had to read it several times and the third repetition of "day" in such a short space of time is what is wrong for me. I also foun…" -
02 MonNew follower
@loved
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01 SunCritiqued
"Mexican Death Squad" by @billypringle
"... for the comment Geezer. I am afraid I will have to look up the difference between a poem and a narrative. As a new member, I will be taking a look around before taking any steps to premium membership. Just to find m…" -
01 SunFirst critique offered
on "Mexican Death Squad" by @billypringle
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01 Sun
- November 2013
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29 FriFirst publication
The Seasons
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29 Fri
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29 FriJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
I am a retired engineer/scientist but have had a life-long dalliance with writing. In my early teens I was writingmy own songs/lyrics and this developed into a love of poetry and poetic verse which I became quite serious about just a few years ago. I write a blog on which Ihave been posting my writing. I know I have lots more to learn about writing poetry.
I am married with two grown boys, unfortunately no grandchildren and non on the horizon. This leaves my wife and I fairly free to indulge a love of travelling. Many weekends in the year we can be found visiting parts of the UK.
I also consider myself an artist and love to photograph some of the places we visit. These interests of course all have their own blogs which I like to keep up todate.
Location: Solihull, UK, GBR
Favorite Poets
I need to think about this ...
Although I read quite a lot
I have never been attracted to one particular poet. I do know that I am a fairly traditional type; however I have been trying to extend myself lately.
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