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Basically Deep
Member since November 2, 2021
Member for 4 years, 7 months
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One Switch
A switch has been flicked today.
A switch unlike any other.
One which can never be turned off.
One which controls all the lights.
One which doesn’t need power.
One which doesn’t flicker when others are turned off.
One which doesn’t flicker when others are turned on.
One which switches off more than it switches on.
One which increases the intensity of one light.
One light of greatness.
One for life.
Lives for life.
Basically Deep’s timeline
- November 2022
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02 WedAnniversary
One year of membership
- March 2022
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18 FriReceived a critique
on One Switch from @Ray Whitaker
"While I rarely use repetition to the degree you have here, I do find it a useful tool on occasion of needing to make a point, in case the reader missed it. I also think that you should add a line near or at the end, to…" -
18 FriReceived a critique
on One Switch from @One
"I personally enjoyed the repetition, it cemented the point of where you were taking this & gave it a unique element. Although Gee & Cat are right to express their opinion & after all that's all it is, I see what they me…" -
17 ThuReceived a critique
on Progress from @Candlewitch
"for the explanations, it helped greatly. I employed this while rereading your poem. I think it is brilliant! and agree with your philosophy. *hugs, Cat p.s. please join in on the rest of the Neopoet experience by readin…" -
17 ThuReceived a critique
on One Switch from @Candlewitch
"Geez already said what I was going to say. good advice. *hugs, Cat" -
16 WedReceived a critique
on One Switch from @Geezer
"enthused with the onerous [One], I would rather you take the time to say: this, that, which, and various other designations and not [a repeat of one]. Otherwise, a good subject. ~ Geezer. ." -
16 WedReceived a critique
on Forever in love from @Geezer
"you are speaking of an orgasm; I would say that "She left as fast as she came." I was a bit confused about what you were trying to say, when I saw that "She came as fast as she left." What evaporated to the sky? [With a…" -
16 Wed
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01 TueReceived a critique
on Progress from @Candlewitch
"I'm not sure I understood your poem. could you explain it to me? thank you, *hugs, Cat *" - December 2021
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11 SatReceived a critique
on Forever in love from @Obadiah Grey
"Hiya, B,D. She came as fast as she left, Shocking to the eyes and warm to the soul. Evaporated to the sky forever engraved in stone. --------------------------------------------- Those are the poetic phrases that I foun…" -
11 Sat
- November 2021
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27 Sat
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05 FriFirst publication
The cursed heart
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05 Fri
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02 TueJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 3 days later.
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Bodybuilder, personal trainer, Author, Motivational Speaker, Scientist, Nutritionist, entrepreneur, philosophy and now poet :)
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