Thank you!

By Blue_Halcyon, 27 February, 2013

This is a big thank you to all of the poets on this site who have ever given me feedback in the past. One of my poems recently placed first in a contest and I know I couldn't have brought my writing to the place that it is at without the help of those who have helped to critique my poems on this site.

http://news.polk.edu/honors-program/polk-state-student-wins-first-place…

Apostolos "Pau…

12 years 4 months ago

let me be the first

to say how proud of you and this site I am. Thank you for taking the chance with neopoet.com. congratulations and may this be the first of many honors in you near future

Ian.T

12 years 4 months ago

Blue

Well done and we all hope that your future is as good,
Where is the poem ??? lol
Yours Ian.T

Blue_Halcyon

12 years 4 months ago

Ian..

They have poem in the article and I had it on this site as well, but I unpublished it for the duration of the contest. Here's the poem:

Semele

Every time the eyes turn away

I cease to exist –

Dying a numbered death

Roaming in solitary, spectral form

The evidence of my existence foregone.

A returning glance won't bring my resurrection...

Hovering bee-like around you,

Minimally acknowledged

This distant yeast mouth

Expands and swallows me.

In the absence of the buzzing wings

The mead waits for Dionysus

To be reborn.

Kailashana2

12 years 4 months ago

You always had the eyes, ears

You always had the eyes, ears and heart of a poet. It wasn't a long stretch of the imagination that you should earn recognition..

Well done!

Esker

12 years 4 months ago

Congrats Blue!

Glad to see people who post here go on and publish...
you give me hope that I too may one day publish
and put my work up and out there...

Its a beautiful poem...

My Favourite line is "the evidence of my existance forgone"
it just rolls good
and the syllable count matchs
three for the big words
and two for the other

Awesome!!!!

weirdelf

12 years 3 months ago

If me and my strange ways helped at all

it is more gratifying than any poem I could have written myself.

Congratulations!

As usual, I can't refrain from a little critique. The line-
This distant yeast mouth
makes me think of thrush, despite its value in brewing beverages. Sorry, that's my deranged mind at work.

A really fine poem and well deserved accolade.

Blue_Halcyon

12 years 3 months ago

You know,

That had crossed my mind as well, Jess. However, since infants get thrush sometimes, I guess in my mind it kind of tied together Dionysus' infant status to his future roll as the god of alcoholic beverages, so that's why it's still in there.

Thank you Anna & Esker for the encouraging thoughts. I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem.

scribbler

12 years 3 months ago

Hi Blue

Congratulations. I doubt I had anything to do with your improvement though ...............stan

Geezer

12 years 3 months ago

Hey Blue, congrats...

I would be unsurpised to find your work among the best anywhere.
Nice to see that all your hard work is paying off. ~ Gee

Blue_Halcyon

12 years 2 months ago

Thank you, Gee! And

Thank you, Gee! And scribbler, I know you have commented on my poems before. Just the fact that you bother to spend the time to comment helps to encourage me and others to keep writing. Don't under estimate the value of your feedback, no matter how minimal you think it is.