( Haiku )

By brittle light, 25 April, 2011

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the poet is lost
cries for help in metaphor
none come to his aid

lou

14 years 3 months ago

Hi

I like it very apt.

lou

brittle light

14 years 3 months ago

Hi to you, Lou

thanks...this one almost sounds like the joke form "did you ever hear the one about a poet who got lost?"

Frederick Kesner

14 years 3 months ago

of cryptic poetry. And therein lay between lines and rhymes
underneath the allusions and metaphor, a cry from deep within the poet,
I wonder if he really goes unheard. Or is his reader unable to send back
a suitable reply? A strong haiku.

brittle light

14 years 3 months ago

there seems to be more in

there seems to be more in this than I consciously considered....that how it works sometimes....thank god, or somebody. I tend to think my stuff as more shallow than I wish it to be. I'm grateful when others perceive something of substence or relative depth. Bolstering my shakey poetic ego

thanks for your always mellifluous comments

Frederick Kesner

14 years 3 months ago

the quiet truth

of the poetic matter is that every person that takes pen to paper in poetry has a certain measure of depth to them, even the rhymesters and poeticules, which I don't find surprising but a relief. A depth in the shallows can be very brilliant as well. Keep that chin up Al, your poetic ego is in a safe haven.

CCfire

14 years 3 months ago

Clever Haiku lol the matter

Clever Haiku lol the matter of the metaphor? I heard from a wise teacher that nothing is right or wrong in poetry and I adhere to that lol of course it gets me into trouble with the purists but I've never been one to conform :)

brittle light

14 years 3 months ago

thanks again for responding..

thanks again for responding....

you have a beautiful and genuine smile

with respect

CCfire

14 years 3 months ago

Thank you, I will take the

Thank you, I will take the compliment with the grace it was given :)

Race_9togo

14 years 3 months ago

Hey Al

Good Haiku.

"Mataphor" = "Metaphor"?

brittle light

14 years 3 months ago

Jim

thanks for the spelling correction....and the comment

magics02

14 years 3 months ago

I like it

Hello BL how are you. I just came across this and I read it once, twice, three times and there is a sublime message in it. Good Haiku. Lood forward to reading more of you.

Blessings
Mona