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you pilfer
pander
gossip
and slander
you're sloppy
lazy
a "don't give a damner"
you cheat
and lie
whenever it suits
you're a lummox
a brute
a scheming galoot
but I should treat you
with more respect?
sorry man!
what did you expect?
character counts
and you ain't no hero
in my book of stats
you're a pluperfect zero
Licia Daniels
14 years 4 months ago
Yes, we all judge
I pity your subject. You come down really, really hard.
Impeccable rhythm-and-rhyme. Thank you for sharing this polished piece.
Diana
Candlewitch
14 years 4 months ago
Dear Al.
I know someone just like this only it is a woman! (and a poisonous reptile of a female, too!) I really like the way this piece builds to the ending... My favorite lines:
but I should treat you
with more respect?
sorry man!
what did you expect?
character counts
and you ain't no hero
in my book of stats
you're a pluperfect zero
Always, Cat
weirdelf
14 years 4 months ago
yes we all judge
and those who claim not to are liars, I judge them for it. [grins]
Yes man! Let it be said.