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Godweed
Member since June 23, 2009
Member for 16 years, 11 months
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excruciation
i have
incredible
moments of
clarity
it’s not
unlike
being high
a sound can
trigger lost
remembrances
a scent
drifting ages
half forgotten
wisping by
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i sense
indelible
depths of
reality
it’s just
so hard
to describe
patterns shift
bring back past
intolerances
dreamers
sifting pages
so well hidden
live a lie
i weep
intangible
from what you
ask of me
it’s not
unlike
bleeding dry
accusations
breed such doubt
insecurity
lovers
losing face now
in angry moments
boast denial
i am
oppressible
my life a
tragedy
always
alone
deprived
words once said
regreted
open heart
broken
losing clarity
muddied by hurt
pass love by
i bear
excruciable
moments of
frailty
i feel
so torn
reviled
sad ghosted
distant
memory
fearful
hoping hands
clutch at straws
is this a lie?
Godweed’s timeline
- June 2024
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22 SatAnniversary
15 years of membership
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10 years of membership
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22 SunAnniversary
5 years of membership
- June 2010
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22 TueAnniversary
One year of membership
- January 2010
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31 SunReceived a critique
on excruciation from @weirdelf
"why has this received no comments for 3 weeks, what are you giving to your reader? I like the structure. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible" -
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02 SatCritiqued
"Blown away" by @Seren
"love this: "then receiving a casket of their deepest condolences" I find this so powerful, exhibiting the emptiness of "their deepest condolences" perfectly, at least for me... but the best lines... "I am now a well of…" - December 2009
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20 SunReceived a critique
on in the aftermath from @Kailashana
"Duh. Sometimes I can't see the forest for the trees. Soul low. PERFECT!! And Jayne, you vocalized it. ~A Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart." -
20 SunCritiqued
"Auntie Sam" by @Rett
"I had a totally different take on this until I read everyone's comments. I saw this as the loss of freedoms, over time, that occur in a democratic society. power attracts the power hungry, they make promises they know t…" -
20 SunReceived a critique
on in the aftermath from @Seren
"I read the comments above and had a thought for the soul low line? ... how about eyes low the valley before would shadow eyes :) but a really good write I enjoyed thank you kind regards love Jayne x x" -
05 SatReceived a critique
on in the aftermath from @Kailashana
"how about *light* instead of *soul*... as it fits with shadow.. Good poem of honest reflection. Thank you. ~Anna "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha" -
05 Sat
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05 SatCritiqued
"The End of Self" by @Rett
"but I'm sappy like that. the last line is beautiful and what love should be, the whole "for better or worse" part of it. long time no read, and this one got me." - September 2009
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17 ThuReceived a critique
on sinusoid from @themoonman
"Hi, I believe this is the first of yours I've read... a very generous write to say the least of it... totally enjoyed the read, thanks for posting it. I didn't really understand the title, so I looked it up, really make…" - August 2009
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30 Sun
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29 SatReceived a critique
on immalleable from @Darby Cain
"except you repeat yourself and it loses something ........idk" -
29 Sat
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28 FriCritiqued
"Reality of Fakery" by @Rett
"This was just a great read, great rhythm... a funny statement on the sad state of society. I'm dismayed at the lengths people will go to in order to appear "perfect" and young. Aging is a beautiful process, and I have n…" -
28 FriCritiqued
"Fleeting Thoughts" by @Sourav
"I've read the other works you posted, and for me, this has the most natural rhythm and is both poignant and profound. I love your use of language, in particular, in the 1st and 2nd verses. I don't know if you meant for…" -
28 FriReceived a critique
on cognitive dissonance from @Rett
"But I'm just a poor old dumb country boy. You're the ejicated city slicker. *G* Always a pleasure reading your poetry. Respectfully, Rett: "When I was born I was so surprised I didn't talk for a year and a half." Gracie…" -
25 TueReceived a critique
on cognitive dissonance from @Sourav
"Thoughtful poetry always attracts me. I liked this very intense and pensive write. You've expressed your feelings wonderfully. A good creative write." -
25 Tue
- July 2009
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27 MonCritiqued
"Edge of Sanity" by @Rett
"this one really hit home... mental illness takes so many forms, physiological, emotional - the scars of the past that haunt so many. this is something i live with, from the other side, and the double entendre here for m…" -
27 Mon
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07 TueCritiqued
"Painted Mask of Eloquence (from chat)" by @Rett
"Very nicely done! Quite different and has a smooth feel and good flow. I can hear the voice in my head (not crazy voices!), the tone, the intonation. We encounter so many masks every day and often even, without intentio…" -
07 TueCritiqued
"Fucking Freedom" by @bjp
"I love the title by the way. I was in the U.S. the first time Bush was elected, and I was astonished. When he was reelected, I was completely flabbergasted. I always believed he was his father's patsy... this said it so…" -
05 Sun
- June 2009
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29 Mon
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28 SunFirst critique offered
on "Sacrificial Lamb" by @Rett
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27 Sat
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24 WedFirst publication
the highway
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24 Wed
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22 MonJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 2 days later.
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