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Rula
By Rula, 8 September, 2013

from the heart
authenticty
would emerge
to surface
naked emotions
that flow words to touch
the hollow cyber
every now and then.

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 1 month ago

Rula

A space in time, this sounds as if there was a rent in time and the writer fell through only to regain their way again.
I liked it, but would have liked just a few more words(not many) to stitch the tear..
Still liked it a lot, Yours Ian.T

Rula

Rula

12 years 1 month ago

Ian

You've captured the sense well as usual except that I'm trying to be back for writing as many things drift me away.I just feel like a log into rough waves.
Thanks for your kind visit.

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 1 month ago

Rula

Just write those things down and they will become a new direction, I think that you are changing your ways of writing, this is where things become blurred, but not for long..
Take care young Lady, Yours Ian.T

Rula

Rula

12 years 1 month ago

dear Ian

I believe you're right. I am not worried. I'm enjoying my time these days just reading and commenting on others'.
Thank you again.

Esker

Esker

12 years 1 month ago

eight lines

found the workings of the poem well..
good word choices and connect
from beginning to end...

Thank You!