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Rula
By Rula, 8 September, 2013

from the heart
authenticty
would emerge
to surface
naked emotions
that flow words to touch
the hollow cyber
every now and then.

Ian.T

Ian.T

11 years 10 months ago

Rula

A space in time, this sounds as if there was a rent in time and the writer fell through only to regain their way again.
I liked it, but would have liked just a few more words(not many) to stitch the tear..
Still liked it a lot, Yours Ian.T

Rula

Rula

11 years 10 months ago

Ian

You've captured the sense well as usual except that I'm trying to be back for writing as many things drift me away.I just feel like a log into rough waves.
Thanks for your kind visit.

Ian.T

Ian.T

11 years 10 months ago

Rula

Just write those things down and they will become a new direction, I think that you are changing your ways of writing, this is where things become blurred, but not for long..
Take care young Lady, Yours Ian.T

Rula

Rula

11 years 10 months ago

dear Ian

I believe you're right. I am not worried. I'm enjoying my time these days just reading and commenting on others'.
Thank you again.

Esker

Esker

11 years 10 months ago

eight lines

found the workings of the poem well..
good word choices and connect
from beginning to end...

Thank You!