Rivulets conjunction

Your eyes will pierce my heart
then how will we see
so I will read your poetry
how lovely tis
your eyes are bliss
I am a cynosure of many eyes
but mine are not like this...
you lady are
a BLISS

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

Comments

raj

10 years 4 months ago

Lovedly

I think if you do away with stanzas 2 and 3, it will lift this poem.

Regards,

lovedly

10 years 4 months ago

thanks dear raj

your advice is wonderful here