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Jun 26, 2017
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The Stone ( Imagery Workshop-one line)
Pitiful mute rocks roll down silently.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
scribbler
8 years ago
Hi Rula
Not sure I've ever known rocks to roll silently but there IS a lot of imagery here
Rula
8 years ago
I really
should have used stones instead of rocks. It works better I think?
wesley snow
8 years ago
Too many stones Rula.
I was told just one, but the verse is clear as gravity.
scribbler
8 years ago
All edits are allowed right up until next exercise begins
And, yes, a single stone is preferable
jane210660
8 years ago
Rocks or tears?
I thought tears worked slightly better than rocks in this.
It's funny isn't it, how we all describe the one thing so completely differently.
Jx