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A Broken Heart / Imagery workshop (ex. 3)

The pitiful broken stone rolled down silently,
this same, once was a real rock.
Now he'd let some hot showers free,
to tell volumes of grief untold.

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Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

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jane210660

jane210660

8 years ago

I like

the imagery of a broken heart and the tears.
I wonder if grief might be a better word than grieves in the last line.
Jx

Rula

Rula

7 years 12 months ago

Dear Jane

much appreciate your kind comment and the suggestion.
Thank you dear.

S

scribbler

7 years 12 months ago

Hi Rula

Very good but I'm a bit put off by the quotation marks

Rula

Rula

7 years 12 months ago

Thank you boss

these were only to highlight the direct and the indirect imagery expressions.