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Feb 26, 2018
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This poem is part of the workshop:
Sunku: beyond rhyme and rhythm, search for new structures in short form
Sunku 7
Little vile
Inevitable fate
Tastes so sweet
Skull bones
Switch blade
Feels so right
Familiar taste
Venomous snake
Never again
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
7 years 4 months ago
I really like...
what you have written. I like the vehemence, the vicious vein of lines. Makes Killer want to stalk the streets again.
lonlyhrtsclub13
7 years 4 months ago
a woman scorned
Is never a good thing. But that familiar taste of poison always seems to be lurking. Perhaps killer needs to visit
weirdelf
7 years 4 months ago
Again, syllable count way off, but good.
My reading
https://vocaroo.com/i/s19sP1CWv44b
weirdelf
7 years 4 months ago
Not a Sunku,
rhe subku is defined b'it threed stanzas and in exh kine,