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Mar 28, 2020
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Through the looking glass
Suffering and pain
The weeping in the wind
Shatters the silence of our times
Loved ones dust in the wind
Names fill the book of life
Letters sent with untold names
Weeping willows cry for us
This world will change
Never two turn back the clock
As we stand in line
Shadows learn two fly
Please don't leave me behind
Sounds of the angry
Surrounding the gates
Someone or no one
Destiny's fate hungry for another minute
Hoping for anyone two hear your plea
Through the looking glass
Reflections please don't bother me
So here we stand
Here we wait
Two cross the river the Styx
Alms for the empty
Penny's for penance
Growing weary my shame
I can't pass on
Only the deaf can hear
Only the blind can see
You need only two sign on the
Dotted line
Yesterday please come back two me
Tomorrow you can leave me alone
Does anyone really care two see
Don't bother no need two
The beginning has always been here for you
Please forgive me
Shadow don't leave me
In this my time of need
I may not be worthy
Yet I still hold out my hand two you
Echoes
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Gypsyknight
5 years 6 months ago
Don't know what two say
Don't know what two say
Eumolpus
5 years 6 months ago
Echoes
would seem to be the title of poem. (The question mark does not work) You have some very nice passages in the poem. This is very strong:
Shadow don't leave me
In this my time of need
I may not be worthy
Yet I still hold out my hand to you
Forget this whole "two" thing, it's absolutely silly and can easily ruin the poem. You have a serious poem here. It has great touch. Treat it with respect.
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