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Dec 06, 2020
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Misfire
I couldn’t think of much else;
why she left, what I did wrong
It was only obvious some years later,
after more experience with wars of the heart,
it had everything to do with being eighteen
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Geezer
4 years 7 months ago
I'm not sure...
about the title, but it drew me in and that's it's job. So I guess... Words of wisdom from the owner of a broken heart. We all
get them, and I guess that eighteen is one of the hardest times. Good write, nothing much to critique as it is a short one. Looking forward to seeing more from you. Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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Michael Anthony
4 years 7 months ago
Appreciate your thoughts
Appreciate your thoughts Geezer. The title was intended to note failure. In this case the subject of the poem. Thanks again, and be well.