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Dec 06, 2020
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Misfire
I couldn’t think of much else;
why she left, what I did wrong
It was only obvious some years later,
after more experience with wars of the heart,
it had everything to do with being eighteen
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Geezer
4 years 10 months ago
I'm not sure...
about the title, but it drew me in and that's it's job. So I guess... Words of wisdom from the owner of a broken heart. We all
get them, and I guess that eighteen is one of the hardest times. Good write, nothing much to critique as it is a short one. Looking forward to seeing more from you. Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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Michael Anthony
4 years 10 months ago
Appreciate your thoughts
Appreciate your thoughts Geezer. The title was intended to note failure. In this case the subject of the poem. Thanks again, and be well.