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Feb 02, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Transient love

Love! It is like the cloud that melts
in the rays of the hot sun;
it is like the blossom that opens
at dawn only to wither at nightfall.

Love! It is the harmony that pleasure's rush
sends through your heart then dies;
it is like the flame of the firefly
transient and doomed to fade.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

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Country/Region: England

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 2 months ago

Although...

I disagree with your assessment of love, you do have a good piece of work here. Welcome to Neopoet. ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

Lavender

5 years 2 months ago

Transient Love

Hello, Midge,
You've sized up the extreme highs and lows of love in a brief, but strong poem. I like that you've used an exclamation point after the first "Love!" I was immediately curious. I did notice that you used "dies" and "die" close together in the same stanza. Perhaps find another word for one of them? Welcome!
Thank you!
Lavender

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|Midge

5 years 2 months ago

Ta!

Thanks to all for nice comments & esp. to Lavender for a good point which i have acted on.