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Lovely Afternoon
She sits at the table
working on a puzzle
I rise from my chair
to pour us some wine
She suddenly asks me
if I might ever come up to her
and tell her I no longer want her
(this happened to a character
in a book she's been reading)
My brief pause causes her
more angst than she can
comfortably carry without
the help of my answer
I tell her I want to stay
as long as the nights
keep chasing after the days
She smiles and sips her wine
and places another piece
in her puzzle
About This Poem
Last Few Words: A simple poem trying to capture an idyllic fall afternoon. The light through the windows, some music, and the wine, of course.
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years 9 months ago
No crits...
and adding my thoughts to it will just take away from a beautiful afternoon. ~ Geez.
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Owl Has My Soul
3 years 9 months ago
Georgously light and heavy at
Georgously light and heavy at the same time. A tender moment within a beautiful relationship.