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Oct 20, 2021
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Lovely Afternoon
She sits at the table
working on a puzzle
I rise from my chair
to pour us some wine
She suddenly asks me
if I might ever come up to her
and tell her I no longer want her
(this happened to a character
in a book she's been reading)
My brief pause causes her
more angst than she can
comfortably carry without
the help of my answer
I tell her I want to stay
as long as the nights
keep chasing after the days
She smiles and sips her wine
and places another piece
in her puzzle
— Michael Anthony, Oct 20, 2021
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: A simple poem trying to capture an idyllic fall afternoon. The light through the windows, some music, and the wine, of course.
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Polished draft
Critiques
Geezer
4 years 7 months ago
No crits...
and adding my thoughts to it will just take away from a beautiful afternoon. ~ Geez.
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Owl Has My Soul
4 years 7 months ago
Georgously light and heavy at
Georgously light and heavy at the same time. A tender moment within a beautiful relationship.
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