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12/23 What Gets You Through The Day

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ATTRACTOR

ATTRACTOR

After all this time, and still no answer
I must ask the question why
I don’t consider myself a chancer
With letters sent and no reply

It’s confusion whilst never knowing
And a cold winter wind is blowing
But keeping warm all the while
As I recall that special smile

But can she ever know I’m waiting
It’s a serious question if one can cope
Yet all’s not lost, as still there’s hope
There’s pleasure in anticipating

But there is one thing never to miss
The genuine opportunity for a kiss

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Onegin sonnet

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: w,yorks, UK, GBR

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

1 year 6 months ago

Oooohhh...

I think that the office-party or a home party would be the answer to that! Make sure that you either plant yourself underneath the mistletoe, or keep track of where she is, and when she gets under it, WHAM! Lay one on her! With all that anticipation and
thought behind it, it should be spectacular! Of course, if you are wrong, and she doesn't fancy you... You may be looking for a new job, and/or facing imprisonment for sexual assault. I thought your heartfelt appeal should have been enough to elicit a response. Maybe take that as a sign. Nicely done Sir, I like it! ~ Geezer.
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

1 year 6 months ago

Hello Poet,

A sonnet is probably beyond my capabilities but I liked what I read. The timorousness and fragility of a a hopeful soul. The only thing that bothers me is how the title is presented! I am put off by all Caps. in a title. It offends my eyes and makes me feel like I am being yelled at!

My favorite lines are:
But can she ever know I’m waiting
It’s a serious question if one can cope
Yet all’s not lost, as still there’s hope
There’s pleasure in anticipating

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

1 year 6 months ago

I agree...

I think I know why you made the title all in caps, that it would make it seem all the more attractive? Nope! Made me wince. ~ Geez.
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