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A MESSAGE IN MY DREAMS

As I lay in my bed dreaming, my brother came to me.
We shall speak in the morning, just you wait and see.
He had long been gone, but in the dark I found a trace,
He was hiding in a looking glass, in light his shining grace.

I’m here now sister, lay safe and in your slumber, listen,
I tell my story, with all my love, as I am on a mission,
I’ve come here with a secret, that I have to share.
Let me hold your hand, and touch the silver in your hair.

I’ve brought you a gift, the one you thought was lost,
Irreplaceable and precious, to balance the limitless cost.
He placed it in my hand, in my fist I curled it tight,
And I held it there until I woke, in the morning light.

As I unfurled my fingers, letters spilled into my palm,
Sister dear I love you, this news will hold you warm.
Written in a note, delicate paper floated into flame,
The script spelled out a message in our mother’s name.

I hope this brings you joy, and all happiness you desire,
On the days the breeze is blowing, hear my whispers to inspire.
And butterflies they flutter as your thoughts come to my mind,
I watch you from the distance, my love you will always find.

Her words like heat soothed me, in this fleeting incident,
And there I lay in wonder, of sleeps illusory event.
The ashes in her memory, lay lost on my white soft sheet,
But in tears of joy and sadness, this moment echoes on repeat.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I think it speaks for itself, it speaks to me.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Margaret Atwood is one of my favourite writers. Carol Ann Duffy, Philip Larkin, Ted Hughes, Wendy Cope and more.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

1 year 6 months ago

Dear Ruby,

Such a poignant piece. well composed. My favorite lines are:

I’ve brought you a gift, the one you thought was lost,
Irreplaceable and precious, to balance the limitless cost.
He placed it in my hand, in my fist I curled it tight,
And I held it there until I woke, in the morning light.

thank you for sharing this, it is appreciated!

*love & hugs, Cat

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

1 year 6 months ago

Hi Cat, thank you for your

Hi Cat, thank you for your read and comments and thank you for posting your favourite lines. I always appreciate your comments. Ruby :) xxx

Lavender

Lavender

1 year 6 months ago

A Message From My Dream

Hello, Ruby,
Like its beautiful final line, the poem reflects on both joy and sadness. This amazing dream feels like a blessing.
Thank you,
Lx

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Poetry_thru_a_…

1 year 6 months ago

Lovely stuff!

My favourite lines are:

As I unfurled my fingers, letters spilled into my palm,
Sister dear I love you, this news will hold you warm.

Leslie

Leslie

1 year 5 months ago

Ruby

The tŕemor in my hands will not alĺow me to tell you ŵhat I really think,
Hòwever I loved tĥìs one.

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

1 year 5 months ago

If it made your feelings so

If it made your feelings so intense, I think I have achieved what I set out to achieve. When I read this to my auntie, I cried. Ruby :) xx

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Horacio

11 months 2 weeks ago

Steeped in Love

From beginning to end I feel the love you have for your sister. Love knocks then enters the heart unapologetically...if we allow it. With the exception of a couple of "misplaced 'Ands'" (wink) your poem speaks volumes. Form is always secondary to content and whether or not it elicits an emotion. Yours did.

Leslie

Leslie

1 month 1 week ago

Ruby,

WOW, AGAIN ANAD AGAIN I JUST DON'T KNOW HOW YOU DRAW THESE OUT. YOUR HEART MUST BE VERY PURE AND THIS EXPERIENCE WAS CELESTIAL OF THAT I AM SURE.